ome parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
The essay discusses allowing young children using the cell phone and internet and not letting them do so. Personally, I believe that children shouldn't be let using the cell phone and accessing the internet before reaching a certain age. I feel this way for two main reasons which I'll describe in the following essay.
First of all, underaged kids should focus on their studies and they should get involved in real life activities to flourish their natural talents. A strong root can help to grow a big tree. So at the very tender age, it'd be mandatory to focus on their studies more and making the base stronger for future perspectives. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in Primary school I didn't have the access to the internet and a cell phone. During that period I focused on my studies which affected my later student life greatly. So, I became sharp in Mathematics, English, and Science as I had built that habit and grew the nature from a very young age.
Secondly, there're some demerits for using the internet and a cell phone. There are lots of vulnerabilities for using the internet and a child might deviate from his or her focus into the cyber world. For instance, there are many websites which are prohibited for underaged people which may hamper their psychological growth in a positive way. Moreover, they can be indulged in cyber crimes and a generation can grow in negative mental health. I can refer to an incident in my life which happened with one of my friends in my school days. He got addicted to video games and later his physical and mental health condition fall apart. When he turned into his 20's he grew fatter and couldn't interact with people in everyday's life properly. So he became more frustrated and depression was about to kill him. To seek salvage from this burden he had to consult a doctor and had to continue his treatment for a long time.
In the end, I'd like to state that children shouldn't be allowed to access a cellphone with an internet connection at a very young age. It can be referred that this might harm their studies and can demoralize their mental stability.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64473684211 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49954427979 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534210526316 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.1805001653 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.0476190476 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0952380952 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52380952381 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199892861825 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631821494034 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645564707923 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13305566114 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610107300867 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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