It is better to take risks and explore new things when you are older than when you are young.
Do you agree or disagree? Please provide reasons and examples to support your answer.
People often possess different perspectives on whether it is better to take risks and explore new things when they are older than they are young. As for me, I strongly disagree that it is better to take risks and explore new things when I am older.
First of all, taking risks and exploring new things needs curiosity, and I am more curious when I am younger. For example, when my father was 25, he was interested in hazardous sports. He engaged in different dangerous sports, such as mountain climbing, diving and so on. As a result, he had experienced various high-risk activities when he was young. However, my father was 50 now. Last week I asked him to do bouldering together. He refused me because the stress of life exhausted his heart. Apparently, my father did not have any curiosity for a dangerous activity or a new thing when he was older.
Secondly, to take risks, I have to be energetic, and I have more energy when I am young. For instance, when I was 22, I started bouldering. I went to boulder twice a week. Besides, I took personal training class once a week to strengthen my muscles. Therefore, I finished five difficult courses in only one month. On the other hand, when I was older, I would become lazy, and I were not willing to do high strength exercises. Hence, I could not identify myself because I lost energy to do other training.
Last but not least, exploring new things needs freedom, and I have more freedom when I am young. Take my sister Vivian for example, when she was young, she joined different clubs to learn new things. Moreover, she was not married, so she did not need to take care for the family. Accordingly, she could attend various activities freely. Nevertheless, after she got married and had two kids, her time was tied by her family. She had to pick up the child, prepare meals, and clean the house. Thus, she could not explore new knowledge literally.
In conclusion, I totally disagree that it is better to take risks and explore new things when you are older. After all, when I am young, I have am curious, energetic and free to take risks and explore new things.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 145, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...der. After all, when I am young, I have am curious, energetic and free to take ris...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5905511811 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55775052553 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49343832021 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7025030407 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.2692307692 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6538461538 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.57692307692 5.45110844103 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326647242634 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970548495072 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124675468006 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236984930538 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137793334878 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.75 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 145, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...der. After all, when I am young, I have am curious, energetic and free to take ris...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5905511811 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55775052553 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49343832021 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7025030407 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.2692307692 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6538461538 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.57692307692 5.45110844103 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326647242634 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970548495072 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124675468006 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236984930538 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137793334878 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.75 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.