It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose with it?
One of the important places in our lives is the neighborhood we live in. We spend most of our time there and we communicate with other residents. It is true that if a movie -theater were going to be built in my neighborhood, some residents agree with that but others not. In my view, a movie theater has a negative influence in my neighborhood for two reasons.
First, there are better uses of the land that will improve our city. A movie theater needs a huge land and it makes lots of pollution like air pollution that the people want to park their vehicles. In the big cities, we do not have many outdoor spaces such as parks, gardens, and lakes. So, these outdoor spaces can not only make the better atmosphere in a city but also decrease the pollution of the air. For example, My cousin lives in Tehran, In her street, Taleghani street, there was a ruined building and the government decided to make a park instead of that because the residents requested the government to build a park near their home. They needed a place for playing the children, walking, and exercising. After the destruction of the house, it took a year to establish a park but in this time children were going to help street cleaner to paint playground equipment and also the children painted what they want on the wall. The painting was an interesting activity for them because they learn how they could work together. After a year, residents usually went to the park at the holiday and they planting some flowers there; these trees made oxygen and used dioxid carbon. As you can see, This park has changed the view of the street and also it will lead to decrease the population.
Second, the movie theater makes a lot of traffic. People who want to visit a movie go to the theater with their vehicles or take a taxi. Increasing the number of the cars leads to increase the traffic of the major streets of the city and it makes the major problem for the residents that live near the movie theater. For instance, I found a work in Shiraz and I rent a small apartment in a suburbs, Fasa city, for two years. Normally, I took me half an hour to get to work. A movie theater was going to build in our neighborhood in an open land that was near our street. As the theater was being constructed, the main street sometimes blocked because of the building constructing. Hence, I had to go to another direction to the work and it took half an hour more. After its construction, the traffic on our neighborhood had increased rapidly because more people were coming to visit movies and the residents usually had a problem with the traffic that the theater made because of the people want to park their cars. So they asked the city to do something. After two months, the government made a parking in order to solve the traffic. Therefore, the theater can make lots of problems if the city does not have a well decision.
To summarize, though some may support the plan, a new theater would not be a great addition to my hometown. Not only does it increase the pollution but also it makes a lot of traffic. Every city should consider all of the aspects of the new building not only for residents but also for the environments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 389, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a suburb' or simply 'suburbs'?
Suggestion: a suburb; suburbs
... Shiraz and I rent a small apartment in a suburbs, Fasa city, for two years. Normally, I ...
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Line 7, column 212, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... of traffic. Every city should consider all of the aspects of the new building not only fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, in my view, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2619.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 582.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91168771031 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.492312314 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431271477663 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.0 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2014300422 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3103448276 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0689655172 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1724137931 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174228151509 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507644997568 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618286684883 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124610505361 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587043647532 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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