People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave?
Our clothes are an important part of our lives. At first sight, we make the preconception from people’s face, behavior, and clothes. Some people believe that our behavior can change based on what we wear and others would oppose it. From my point of view, these influence our behavior for two important reasons.
First, people show different reaction based on your appearance and it affects your behavior. When you wear different clothes, people may show a negative reaction. Hence, you may feel upset. For example, two years ago, when I was coming back from my work I had a call from one of my old friend Sara, who was my roommate at college for four years. She decided to have a party and invited my cousin and me for that. Her party was about graduation on master’s degree and she decided to invite her friends. She asked me wore an old-fashioned dress as the theme of the party. I was so happy and I agreed. Therefore, I called my cousin and talked about the party and we made a decision to wear our grandmother’s dress. In the day of the party, I reserved two tickets in the morning because we had to go her city by airplane. We wore our dresses and went to the airport, it took an hour and the traffic was heavy. When we arrived at the airport, the fly had taken off. We had to buy other tickets. The seller frighten when she saw us because of our strange, old-fashioned clothes. We spoke with her about the party. After we got the tickets, we ate launch when we were waiting for next flight. After one hour, we arrived at Tehran and we were at Sara’s house and we had been there for two days. This experience taught me that the people react based on your clothes and it affects our behavior.
Second, the certain clothes are appropriate for certain work. When you wear clothes as same as your co-workers, it seems as uniform and the clients feel reliability. For example, since I graduated from the university, Azad University, I am working as a computer engineering in language institution. In this place, we communicate with children and adults. So we try to have friendly relations with them. I usually wear colorful and sport dress such as jeans, T-shirt, and sport shoes. Because in my view the children feel comfortable and reliable when we are as same as them. One day, one of our students made a mistake that she formatted the computer of the class. Unfortunately, the data on this system had deleted. She was nervous and sad for her mistake; she came to my room and requests me to bring the data back. I know her because the students usually ask their computer questions from me and I speak with them about their classes and their hobbies before their classes. I could restore the data and solved the problem. She asked me did not speak about her mistake with others. She trusted me and believed me that I could help her. Therefore, I can communicate with others better and it affects my work because of the others reflections. Their good reflections make me happy and I get energy so I can work better. As you can see our appearance impact on our behavior.
As I have illustrated, your clothes influence your behavior. Some people treat you based on your clothes and you have to wear specific clothes at work. If you want to feel confident, you have to be careful about what you wear.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 120.0 43.0788530466 279% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2734.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 598.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57190635452 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94510247834 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58245095188 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436454849498 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 840.6 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 31.0 9.59856630824 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 42.0 20.6003584229 204% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.4279007304 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.0952380952 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2380952381 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85714285714 5.45110844103 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146675646106 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040972847751 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731218706735 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112465634873 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522861012125 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.63 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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