The place that we live have lots of effects in our lives. The presence of a restaurant in the neighborhood would bring lots of advantages and some disadvantages to the place. Some people believe that having such a place in their neighborhood is awful because of all the cons that it brings to the place such as lots of noises, pollution problems, increases the crime rate etc. ; others would disagree. In my view, the advantage of building a restaurant near my home over weigh the disadvantages of it for the following reasons.
First and foremost, the restaurant would attract lots of businesses to the place. Thus, not only does it provide abundant job opportunities to the residents, but also the mayor would get more taxes which would be spent on the place. For instance, when I was a child, my family lived in a quiet place which was really far from the center of the city. My father was a teacher and he had to spend hours on heavy traffics to go to his job. After some time a new restaurant was opened in our neighborhood. Many people came to the place because the food of the restaurant was delicious. A year later, the people understand that it is a great place to start other businesses too and a big shopping center opened in the place. After about two years, the place was completely crowded and a lot of stores and markets was in the place. So the mayor get a lot of taxes from the new businesses and not only the streets were clean and fantastic but also they decided to build a park in our neighborhood too. It was a great change. After that, because the place becomes really important, they built a school there. As a result, my father found a job in the newly opened school. As you can see, the new restaurant had great effects in everyone’s life in the neighborhood.
Second, the restaurant and other businesses that will be opened in the place would bring a lot of fun to the residents. People can spend a lot of time in the restaurant with their families and their friends. For example, I live in a place that there is a great and famous restaurant in my neighborhood. When I moved in, I thought that the smells that would come from the restaurant and also noises of the people who would come from other places of the town to the place would bother me, but after some time not only I am not annoyed by the noises but also I am happy to live in a vibrant place. Because I spend a lot of time in the restaurant, especially after work when I am tired. Watching people that are happy give me a lot of energy. I also have found a lot of friends there which I spend most of my weekends with them.
In sum, though some may believe that it is not good to build a restaurant in their neighborhood, as you can see the restaurant would bring lots of advantages and fun to the people who live in the environment around it. I think all the mayors should consider building such a great places in all states
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...tages and fun to the people who live in the environment around it. I think all the mayors should consider...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 544.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36764705882 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56574522604 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.386029411765 0.524837075471 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8875026492 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1481481481 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48148148148 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0744154369038 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0285687040869 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361299953494 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0573628043372 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171381145233 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.49 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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