Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of
money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and
examples to support your opinion.
Tremendous changes have taken place in the world in recent decades. People have access to the Internet in almost everywhere. As a result students can easily find electronic versions of all books. Thus, the significance of libraries is fading. Though some people may believe that schools should only consider education aspect of student’s life, I think that schools should spent enough money on children’s physical activities too for the following reasons.
First and foremost, a healthy mind needs a healthy body. Researchers claimed that students need at least one hour of physical activity every day. They showed that students who are physically active tend to have better grades, cognitive performance and they can concentrate on the subject better. For example, I read in the newspaper that they conduct a research in which they studied two schools. In the first one students were forced to exercise every morning and in the second one they did not spend any time for physical activities. At the end of the semester they took same exam from the students. In the first school that exercise was mandatory, the students got better results. The scientists reported that it is because the children were more energetic in the class and could concentrate and think easily. But in the second one they were sleepy and tired. I think that all schools should add at least ten minutes of morning exercise to the children’s schedules.
Second, schools should consider all the students with different passions. Not all the students unanimously like to study. They have to provide other incentives for youth people who do not like to study. For instance, when I was in high school, I was not a silent student and I did not like to spend my time in school. But after they bring some physical competition to the school and said that only students with good marks can participate in that activities, I tried hard to become qualified for taking part in that activities. And now, I am really successful in my major which is swimming. This experience taught that schools should think about successfulness of their students which is not always provided by studying scientific books.
In sum, though some may think that schools are only responsible for the scientific life of a student, but as you can see by adding physical activities not only does help students to be more successful in their studies, but also bring other incentives for students who do not like to study. I think that government should force the schools to provide some physical hobbies to the students. Especially in today world that technological devices bring a lot of negative impact on our physical activity behavior.
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Suggestion: one student; a student; students
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, thus, at least, for example, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00892857143 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73289774235 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477678571429 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.1230039832 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.76 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.92 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14716970451 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420780457428 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344685247999 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988409167738 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00566895907139 0.0645574589148 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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