It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
It is important for children to distinguish between right and wrong in young age. Some would argue that punishment is essential for the kids to learn from the mistake. It is agreed that punishment is necessary for the kids to change the behaviour and learn from their error. This essay will first discuss that parents and teachers should monitor incessantly and correct them, and then discuss that punishment should not be physical or emotional, followed by a logical conclusion.
Children are most vulnerable to get affected by surrounding and digital media. It is often getting painful for the parents and teachers to observe what they watch on the internet or smart devices. Hence it is mandatory for the parents and teacher to teach the dangerous of online activity and how to conduct themselves properly. It is often the case that children may hesitate to discuss their problem with their parents or teachers.Therefore, it is imperative to block inimical sites from their view which has a possibility of exploiting the kids. For example, as per survey from Oxford University government had seen 80% drop in online exploitation after the introduction of "social behaviour cases".
Despite this, many children continue their wrong deeds, so punishment is inevitable to correct them. When parents and teacher try to discipline their kids, they should be very conscious that they do not affect them mentally. Many parents support the corporal punishments which may affect young people mentally and physically and starts developing an aversion. Instead, they can speak with them first and try to make them understand the consequences of their action. For example, as per the Indian government recent survey, the pupils who go through the physical assault in young age has a more chance of getting arrogant when they grow up. Therefore, the government had passed a law to cease the physical punishment in schools.
In conclusion, it is crucial for the children to learn about right and wrong at a young age. Although punishment is needed to correct them, parents should be vigilant about the impact of the external surroundings and correct without affecting them mentally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20679886686 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82063366774 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518413597734 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0884716563 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.117647059 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88235294118 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 11.8709677419 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319264599587 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107913395215 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723873587567 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209070607966 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0908479752167 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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