it is important for government to spend money to improve internet access
In the progressive and sophisticated world where we live, governments spend much money for different sections of a society to improve their conditions. There also have been two contrasting attitudes toward this, while some believe that spending money on public transportation is really indispensable for metropolitan cities, others adhere to the idea that improving the internet access is really important for prosperous of society. I subscribe the second perspective. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
To begin with, increasing the internet access plays an essential role on modifying the educational system of country. Many people in different parts of educational institutions rely on internet for gathering information, processing their data or exchanging their knowledge with other people all over the world. To shed light on this matter, I will bring up an example in which I was involved, In the second year of bachelor studies in university we had an assignment related to our environment science class to collect information about new methods that used all over the world for preserving it. The only instrument and resource for acquiring information from the foreign scientists was searching through internet but the network service was in inconvenient situation in our university and sometimes it was stopped working for several days. This example aptly illuminates that how beneficial and important is to modify the network system for our scientists.
Another noteworthy point to be mentioned is that internet is indispensable for all parts of government systems like policy or military. Our presidents should contact emergency with their counterparts in foreign countries during war or economic sanction. Furthermore, controlling the equipment related to military system is done from a data center and it is sensible to the speed of sending a message through internet. The United Nation society found that about 70 percent of battles all over the world start without attendance of soldiers and just novel kinds of weapons control from a center of various countries through internet. Controlling Since the low-quality internet creates predicament for all parts of country management.
In brief, contemplating all aforementioned reasons, one can logically conclude that the influence of internet access on different parts of country such as educational is inevitable. All in all, ignoring the influence of extending public transportation of pollution of cities, I highly recommended that the importance of political or military systems for preserving countries in different situations should stimulate government to spend for improving the internet access.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, really, second, so, while, in brief, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5931372549 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11849091428 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546568627451 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.9869104134 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.625 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385905502748 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117052570705 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113599450937 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257491458965 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121324630793 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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