It is important to keep old friends than to make new firends
Whereas some people believe that it is important to make new friends, I believe that it is more important to maintain your old friendship. Personally, I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explain in the following passage.
First, old friends know you much better than your new friends. It takes time and effort to have a strong bond with anyone, and with our old friendship, we have given both. With time, our connection with old friends increase. For example, our bonding will be much better with our school friends than with the friend which we make during our working days. Though people we meet, will have same level of maturity level but, that maturity, we develop together with our school friends. Perhaps, people in our work are more competitive than people we has met during our childhood. In our childhood, we had not enter the real world, so the friendship was also pure at time with not competition in between, and with time we grow together by understanding each other strengths and weaknesses. Thus, childhood friendship is important for me.
Secondly, we can ask for help from our old friend whenever we are in need. We can also trust them to share our secrets. As our childhood or old friend know us from long time, we automatically create a bond which feel like a family at the end. Even we do not hesitate to ask for the help. However, if we think to ask for help from our new friend, we will definitely hesitate and feel awkward to take help even though our new friend may not feel anything. It is an human nature that we do not feel comfortable to share our though with people until we get close to them. In my personal experience, whenever I feel low or upset, I use to connect my school friends as they know me every well so their suggestion also depend upon my behavior which they know about very well. But, if I choose to share the same with my colleague,I will be little concise to share it openly.
In conclusion, I would like to say that it is important to keep contact with your old friends because they know you much better than your new friends. This does not mean that we should not try to make new connection, but when it comes to be with someone at time of difficult, we feel comfortable with our childhood friends and if time and situation allows, your new relationship a person will definitely become an old relation one day.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ork are more competitive than people we has met during our childhood. In our childh...
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Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'entered'.
Suggestion: entered
...childhood. In our childhood, we had not enter the real world, so the friendship was a...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...new friend may not feel anything. It is an human nature that we do not feel comfor...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...rience, whenever I feel low or upset, I use to connect my school friends as they kn...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...oose to share the same with my colleague,I will be little concise to share it open...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, for example, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52668213457 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45976882883 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457076566125 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5512179894 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.55 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.55 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225922489479 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893500929171 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960239010259 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185129626998 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750246505133 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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