It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over the last few decades, as people awareness about global events has increased, a discussion has arised over wether people should be informed of all the events, even when they seem irrevalent to their lives. Personally, though, I believe that it is necessary to be aware of what is happening around the globe. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, some information may seem irrevalent at first, but they might be useful in the long run. Some News about political changes or changes of some laws in other countries might be useful in the near future. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Last year I read about the change in the residency rules in England. I didn’t care much that time because I didn’t think of studying abroad. However, after a year I was given a chance to pursue an internship in a foreign country and suddenly I remembered the law that I have read about. That just reminded me that by choosing England I will be able to increase my chance at getting a residency after my study. Had I not read that seemingly irrevalent news, I would not have been able to choose the best option.
Secondly, people will have more topics to communicate if they are aware of the latest news. Talking about unfamiliar or strange things that happen in the world, can help ordinary people to forget about the stresses of their daily lives. For example, several months ago scientists launched a new spaceship to the mars to investigate some living conditions. This piece of news had nothing to do with my parents, who are both Iranian teachers. However, they talked about that issue at home for weeks during dinner time. They talked about the possibility of life in outer space and what could happen if people can travel to mars. It caused them to forget about their own concerns for seconds, refreshing their minds to meet future challenges.
In conclusion, I believe that being aware of international news is important, because it might be useful in the long run and because that way people will have more topics to talk about.
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- TPO 51 integrated 80
- TPO 52 integrated 80
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- TPO 56 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 621, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mar'.
Suggestion: mar
...at could happen if people can travel to mars. It caused them to forget about their o...
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Line 7, column 45, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...onclusion, I believe that being aware of international news is important, because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70810810811 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50176854903 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545945945946 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6228299286 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6842105263 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4736842105 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155944878729 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475354373373 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379239465984 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941783333714 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291960694452 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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