Knowledge would never be extra for people. There are always new things to learn even if it cannot be used for now, but it would be useful at one point in the future. From my point of view, it has always been important to know about events happening around the world, even it is unlikely to affect one's daily life because to be aware of the news around the world helps people to understand people better and to have opportunities to improve themselves.
To start with, when somebody is aware of the things that happen around the world, he can have the ability to understand others better. Life is full of different kind of feelings, habits, and thoughts. If people build a wall around themselves, they will not see things with a broadened perspective. What I mean is that people should be open to various styles which are not in the same way that they have. To be more specific, every culture has its own characteristics. However, it does not mean that something is bad if it is not similar to your values. Variety makes life a great place to live in. Therefore, if one knows what is happening in the other part of the world, he can develop empathy to understand others. In our world, while one part of the world suffers from hunger, another one has an incredibly wealthy. It is impossible to imagine people from both parts has no interaction with each other. In some point, they need to know what is happening in another part of the world, and when it happens people start to understand each other. A recent study has shown that the internet has an indispensable impact on the quality of relationships from different cultures. As a result, people become more aware of differences and build a better understanding of others.
Another point to consider is that knowing news around the world can be beneficial for people to improve themselves. Some technologies in life become available to specific places before others. If people tend to stay in their small world, they will not have the chance to experience these technologies. For example, smartphones make life convenient for many people. If people do not follow things happening around the world, they will not be aware of smartphones. This situation can cause negative effects because people cannot improve themselves by using smartphones. On the other hand, people can benefit from the following events around the world.
To sum up, for the two reasons mentioned above, it is crucial to know what is happening around the world even though it does not have an impact on one's daily life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, i mean, kind of, as a result, to start with, to sum up, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74330357143 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58854573016 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459821428571 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0449550768 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5416666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344914787403 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090721262696 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0984372464642 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230506669122 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352195487564 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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