Is it as important for older people to learn and study new things as young people to do so?
There is no doubt that nowadays, sciences have profound effect on the people’s lives. No one can deny that twenty one century is not a knowledgeable ear. Therefore some people believe that it is essential for old people to be able for learning and studying as young people to do. Strongly, I agree with this statement because it is probable that old people deal with complicated situation lonely and life style is changing quickly.
First and foremost, every person may counter complicated situation lonely to solve his problem by his own. Old people face this situation severely. Therefore if they are not able to learn or read as same as young, they will have terrible condition. To illustrate, cell phone has become an essential devices for every person, now. People can use it for many purposes including make communication, searching for their required instruments and most important among them emergency condition. Old people need it as same as others because sometimes often they are alone and also they are disable to do some works by their own. If they are not able to learn about new thing, they will not take advantage of many facilities which make more convenient life. Therefore they should be able to study and learn to respond their needs in hard condition.
Another reason that supports the importance of learning and studying for old people like young is the changing life style. It is clear crystal that life condition is very different in comparison with the past. As many devices have been changed, if people do not be able to adapt with new technology, they can have very complicated condition in their life. In addition they must spend a lot of time and money to reach their purpose. Old people are on the first list of them because if they do not adapt themselves with this new lifestyle by studying and learning, they will feel that they are separated from society and it has a profound negative effect on them.
In a nutshell, changing life style and terrible condition of old people support the required ability from old people to study and learn as same as others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: twenty-one
...ople's lives. No one can deny that twenty one century is not a knowledgeable ear. The...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...one century is not a knowledgeable ear. Therefore some people believe that it is essentia...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...ld people face this situation severely. Therefore if they are not able to learn or read a...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'device'?
Suggestion: device
...ate, cell phone has become an essential devices for every person, now. People can use i...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disabled'.
Suggestion: disabled
... often they are alone and also they are disable to do some works by their own. If they ...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...lities which make more convenient life. Therefore they should be able to study and learn ...
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Suggestion: addition,
...complicated condition in their life. In addition they must spend a lot of time and money...
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Suggestion:
...has a profound negative effect on them. In a nutshell, changing life style and t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, so, therefore, in addition, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83933518006 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53706042367 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468144044321 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3005122112 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0555555556 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353740327173 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121608367628 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123661550618 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251363563467 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421094112911 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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