Some people believe that a good ability of adapting or adjusting to a new condition or circumstance is more important than knowledge in a job or in a field. What do you think?
Undoubtedly, having high quality in the work is an essential factor to achieve a better life condition for everyone. Some people believe that knowledge is a necessary factor in a field. From my point of view, adopting or adjusting is more important than knowledge in a job or field because knowledge could be achieved during work period and people are successful who have strong connection with others in the work place.
First and foremost, when people adapt themselves in a job, they can make relationship with others profitably. It creates better opportunities than people are isolated from others in the work place. It is obvious that outgoing people attract more people. People who are adaptable could have better position in their work because they deal with more people and they can take advantage of this characteristic. As they have strong connection with others, they could get a promotion easily. To illustrate my cousin works in a corporation that is famous in my city. Although he had not high grade for graduation, he had a flexible personality. Therefore he was hired as a part-time employee. After a while, he could make a good relationship with one of the managers and was promoted to a permanent as a senior engineer
Another reason which supports the idea that being adjusted is more essential than being knowledgeable is that knowledge could be acquired by making relationship with others and receiving training from them. If people make close relationship with experienced people, they will get the worthwhile experiences over time. Ten years ago, when I started my work, I did not have any practical knowledge about my field. As I had good relationships with my colleagues, I could enhance my practical knowledge in different aspects of my field. Adversely, one of my colleagues who was professional could not adjust himself with working conditions. He conflicted with his manger frequently. Finally, since he could not adjust to the condition, he resigned. I was supposed to take his position because I became professional and experienced during my work times.
In a nutshell, people who have ability to adjust himself to a new condition can take advantage of this feature to make relationship with others and get experience and knowledge from them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, so, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10695187166 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94975414246 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7554361487 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208720292693 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706813284451 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755675467708 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159162743394 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601070351194 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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