Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Work is an important part of our lives. No matter where we are or what we do, we cannot escape our responsibilities in school or at work. Some people believe that it is more important to be able to work in a group while others disagree. In my view, though both skills are important, the most successful people know how to work independently for two very important reasons.
First, you don’t always have a group to depend on. The benefits of being able to work in a group are obvious, but most of the things we do in life require us to do it alone. Without this ability, it’s very hard to do things well. For example, when I was in university, I took a physics class. The professor who taught the class was good, but he wasn’t effective. It was hard to follow his lectures. Many students in the class, including me, formed study groups. We worked together in the library as a group. It was great. We learned a lot. However, I would study by myself afterwards too. It was important because I needed to really master it for the test. After the course I learned, that the students who focused only on group work didn’t do as well as those that also worked alone. When students had to take the test, they had to do it alone. They couldn’t depend on another’s idea or help. This experience taught me that the ability to work independently is much more important.
Second, an independent mind comes from independent work. When you work in a group, you have to be part of the group. Sometimes, you give up some ideas or focus on what other group members want. This takes away your sense of independence. For example, I read a book on psychology a few weeks ago. It was an interesting book that talked about how groups influence people. The author provided an example about a jury in a court of law. I learned that there is a lot of pressure to agree in a jury. Most people follow others who state their opinion. She stated that when only one person disagreed with the group, many other people would follow. In other words, most people don’t say what they feel unless someone else does. This is a natural result of group work: few people lead others. Consequently, most people learn to follow and not lead. Since success often results from strong leaders and independent minds, this book helped show me that the ability to work in a group is not as important as the ability to work alone.
In sum, we must know how to work both in a group and by ourselves to do well in life, but the ability to work independently is more important. Not only does it help you succeed with more common work that you must do alone, but it also helps you develop the independent mind that is essential for success. We should all spend at least some time working alone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, really, second, so, well, while, at least, for example, as well as, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50887573964 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53970949035 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477317554241 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.6003584229 180% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1413504378 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.7837837838 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7027027027 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75675675676 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329892935931 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811420152772 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862708417116 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232997099763 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559140405783 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 11.7677419355 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.68 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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