Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Work is the crucial part of everyone’s life. All of us have some or the other responsibilities to accomplish. Some people think that the ability to work independently is more important than working with a group as a team; however, others believe it vice versa. Personally, I support the idea that one should be able to work with a group of people as a team, for the following reasons.
First of all, the working in a team help you improve your performance and work more efficiently. when many people work together to reach the same goal, they discuss and perform with efficiency to get a good outcome. For instance, when I was working as an ICU respiratory therapist in a tertiary health care centre, I was a part of the team for patient care. Once we had a patient of plural effusion in Cardiac unit. The doctors though that it was due to cardiac failure, however, my opinion was that it was caused due to the underlying lung collapse. Untill the investigation were out, we all agreed mutually to put the patient on mechanical ventilator and later, take action on the basis of the test results. Consequently, we were able to make a wise decision and without any complications, we could accelerate patient’s recovery. Conversely, if I had treated the patient as lung collapse due to immobilization without consulting the consulting physician or if the physician would have treated the patient giving diuretics, it would have resulted in undesirable outcomes. We would have harmed the patient than not doing any good. As you can see, this example demonstrates how important it is to be able to work as team.
Moreover, ability to work in a team helps you to finish multiple necessary tasks within the given time. Although if you know how to work independently, it is not possible every time to execute different tasks in time. Doing household chores is a perfect example for this. I and my husband have to go to the office for work daily. In addition, we have many household chores to perform. For example, cooking meals,preparing breakfast, doing dishes, spending time with the kids, house cleaning, and washing clothes. Even though I can do all of this without anybody’s help, yet I need to work with my husband and kids so that we all manage together to finish the work in time and spend some family hour. This is only possible if we distribute our responsibilities and work as a team.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that one should have the ability to work in a team. This is because it promotes efficient execution of work with positive outcome and because group work helps you to complete multiple necessary tasks within the time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, you know, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78091106291 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91503006107 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466377440347 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0763101457 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8333333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2083333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331761624109 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103950413234 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112923169295 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241530779488 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10997350594 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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