Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Education is the integral part of our life. In order to enhance the student’s learning experience, some people are of the opinion that the school teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn, however, others oppose this idea. Considering the overall merits and demerits of this policy, I believe that the salary of the tutor should not be dependent on the students learning due to the following reasons.
To begin with, this proposal will not be fair to the lecturer. Learning is a two-way process in which a teacher work diligently to extend their knowledge to the students and on the other hand, a student is willing and active in the process of learning. What if the student is not interested and doesn’t perform well in the subject. My cousin is a good example for this. Being of the same age, I and my cousin pursued secondary education from same school. Our Math professor was excellent in his teaching methods and strategies to make the class more interesting and comprehensible for all students irrespective of their grasping power. I was very excited and keen to learn Math in his teaching session. Unlike me, my cousin was least interested and busy doing drawing and idle in the same class. Even after the professor’s efforts to make him understand solving the math Problems he never liked that subject. As a result, he performed poorly in the test. I don’t think it is justified to hold the professor responsible and penalize him by giving less pay because of the my cousin and similar student’s low performance in math.
Moreover, paying the tutor as per the student’s learning will in fact discourage them in executing their task efficiently. Instead of this, if the school gives them a fixed salary with a reward in the form of bonus or award of best teacher could upbeat their professional performance. For Example, when I was in high school, the students were required to give a feedback, nominate and choose the best teacher of the year. This not only have had motivated them to apply better teaching and learning methods but also nurtured positive results of students in the examination. This was one of the reasons for our school to be the best teaching institutes in my hometown.
To sum up, teachers should be paid regardless of the students learning because this will motivate their efforts to execute an effective teaching and consequently stimulate better outcomes of the students taught be them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to experience
... to enhance the student's learning experience, some people are of the opinion that th...
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...d to hold the professor responsible and penalize him by giving less pay because ...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'my'?
Suggestion: the; my
...alize him by giving less pay because of the my cousin and similar student's low p...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
... a reward in the form of bonus or award of best teacher could upbeat their professional...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, for example, in fact, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94244604317 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82399124177 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52278177458 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.914321572 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.05 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271494717024 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771441163371 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077381816516 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195038175158 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722484760779 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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