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It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.

In my opinion old and new friends are not equal. May someone with many years of friendship is important than a person with a month, from different prospectives. Regarding this belif, personaly I am agree that it is important to keep old friends.

First, trust and being confidence abotu someone is a hard issue for everyone to be honest with someone and relay on him. It will not achievable by a day or month. For, example I have an old friend and she's name is Mahsa, she is a pretty good girl and we are together since we were child. I always relied on her in different areas by asking help to give me loans or giving my some of checks to take it to the clients or asking him to take care of my little son when I was in a work travel. I trusted him completly. One day she wasn't in the town, so I asked from one of the guys which was working the department and I meet him for 2 months, to deliver one of my checks to client. It was bad idea but that day I had a hard working schedule. After three days I had a letter from curts which they were calling me to curt because of cheeting in paying my checks. After a while we found out that the person which I trusted him to deliver my checks was a way of from town. As you can see trust is hard to achieved, and relying on new friends is hard for me now.

Second, being comfortable with someone which you know it for years is easy than someone which you know for a few days. The old people know well you are your habbits, beliefs, and actions in different situations and It make you to be comfortable with them. For instance, Mahsa is my best friend in my life which I have, I am taking rounds with her in weekends and shopings. She never became angry or upsset about me because we both know eac other very well. In contrast, on day I meet her friend Aida. In next days when I saw him I wasn't comfortable with him. After a while of knowing each other, I wasn't able do a few things which I was doing when Mahsa was there. As a result, since its improtent for me to be comfortable with someone, the old friends which I know them or they are know me are important from new friends.

To sum up, when we are with friends means we are comfortable and relax with them. It bring us to having a lots of fun from being together and trust each other. So, I personaly feel more comfortable and trust with my old friends rather than new ones.

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In my opinion old and new friends are not equal. Maybe someone with many years of friendship is important than a person with a month, from different prospectives. Regarding this belief, personally, I agree that it is important to keep old friends.

First, trust and being confident about someone is a hard issue for everyone to be honest with someone and rely on him. It will not be achievable by a day or month. For example, I have an old friend, and she is Mahsa, she is a pretty good girl, and we have been together since we were a child. I always rely on her in different areas by asking for help to give me loans or giving my some of checks to take to the clients, or asking him to take care of my little son when I was on work travel. I trusted him completely. One day she wasn't in the town, so I asked one of the guys who was working the department, and I had met him for two months, to deliver one of my checks to the client. It was a bad idea, but that day I was busy. After three days, I had a letter from the courts which they had called me to the court because of cheating in paying my checks. After a while, we found out that the person who I trusted him to deliver my checks was away from town. As you can see, trust is hard to achieve, and relying on new friends is hard for me now.

Second, being comfortable with someone who you know it for years is easy than someone which you know for a few days. The old people know well your habits, beliefs, and actions in different situations, and It makes you to be comfortable with them. For instance, Mahsa is my best friend in my life, who I have; I am taking rounds with her on weekends and shoppings. She never became angry or upset with me because we both know each other very well. In contrast, one day, I met her friend Aida. In the next days when I saw her, I wasn't comfortable with her. After a while of knowing each other, I wasn't able to do a few things which I was doing when Mahsa was there. As a result, since it is important for me to be comfortable with someone, the old friends who I know them or they know me are important from new friends.

To sum up, when we are with friends, it means we are comfortable and relax with them. It brings us to have lots of fun from being together and trusts each other. So, I personally feel more comfortable and trust my old friends rather than new ones.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...s. Regarding this belif, personaly I am agree that it is important to keep old friend...
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Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: she's
.... For, example I have an old friend and shes name is Mahsa, she is a pretty good gir...
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Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the checks') or simply say ''some checks''.
Suggestion: some of the checks; some checks
...king help to give me loans or giving my some of checks to take it to the clients or asking him...
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Line 3, column 475, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'work travel'.
Suggestion: work travel
...ake care of my little son when I was in a work travel. I trusted him completly. One day she w...
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Line 3, column 527, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...l. I trusted him completly. One day she wasnt in the town, so I asked from one of the...
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Line 3, column 858, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ecause of cheeting in paying my checks. After a while we found out that the person wh...
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Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
... actions in different situations and It make you to be comfortable with them. For in...
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Line 5, column 532, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...end Aida. In next days when I saw him I wasnt comfortable with him. After a while of ...
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Line 5, column 599, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... After a while of knowing each other, I wasnt able do a few things which I was doing ...
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Line 5, column 784, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...d friends which I know them or they are know me are important from new friends. T...
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Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'brings'?
Suggestion: brings
...are comfortable and relax with them. It bring us to having a lots of fun from being t...
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Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
... relax with them. It bring us to having a lots of fun from being together and trust ea...
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Line 12, column 383, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the checks') or simply say ''some checks''.
Suggestion: some of the checks; some checks
... for help to give me loans or giving my some of checks to take to the clients, or asking him t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 531, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
.... I trusted him completely. One day she wasnt in the town, so I asked one of the guys...
^^^^^
Line 14, column 528, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...ida. In the next days when I saw her, I wasnt comfortable with her. After a while of ...
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Line 14, column 595, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
... After a while of knowing each other, I wasnt able to do a few things which I was doi...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, you know, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 60.0 15.1003584229 397% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 38.0 13.8261648746 275% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 30.0 11.0286738351 272% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 154.0 43.0788530466 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 134.0 52.1666666667 257% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3880.0 1977.66487455 196% => OK
No of words: 932.0 407.700716846 229% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.16309012876 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.52527601527 4.48103885553 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65102784948 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.268240343348 0.524837075471 51% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1166.4 618.680645161 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 27.0 9.59856630824 281% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 14.0 3.51792114695 398% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 23.0 4.94265232975 465% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 48.0 20.6003584229 233% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7084825995 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8333333333 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 36.0 11.8709677419 303% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214518111679 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071101064207 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0966368908064 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155949621566 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100816392055 0.0645574589148 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.85 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 5.7 8.01818996416 71% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, you know, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments