"Knowledge is power." With heavier competition tainting our lives this says cannot be more true. In this regard, it is important to read or watch articles and get to know what is happening around the world. It is my belief that getting information from people who have different views than I do is more beneficial. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people can broaden their perspectives. In this competitive world, it is vital to differentiate oneself from others. People can open their eyes to new knowledge and cultures they have never experienced before by getting news from contrasting views. For example, one of my friends Katey enjoyed watching debate shows on her way to high school. As a result, she got into Seoul national university. This was possible because she was able to develop an unbiased view. The interviewers in her college liked her perspective and she was able to get passed. This shows that reading or watching controversial views is important in one's life.
On top of that, it can lead to a better world. To be specific, If the number of people with copious knowledge increases unfair treatments or policies can be changed. What I mean is that politicians will not be able to fool the citizens. For example, in the past, it was hard to get to know what is happening around the world because there was not enough internet. However, these days people can have access to the news anywhere and anytime. Moreover, they can see what other people think about the article through comments. This led to the improvement of citizenship. As a result, people procrastinate on unfair policies and discrimination. This clearly shows that getting to know different knowledge is vital.
At first glance, some people might think that a different view will just bring conflicts. However, based on the idea related to perspective and society, one can logically conclude that reading or watching news given from a different view is pivotal in our lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, for example, i feel, i mean, as a result, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91836734694 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80182663118 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536443148688 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8983786095 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.347826087 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9130434783 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5652173913 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196565721628 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584721030703 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588908034334 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140055774047 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369851641429 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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