It is now possible for scientist and tourist to travel to remote natural environment, such as the south pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is now possible for scientist and tourist to travel to remote natural environment, such as the south pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Today’s technological advancement made the impossible possible. Remote areas are no more remote. But visiting them is not always wise and I will explain my reasons in the following essay.

First, remote nature places, such as south pole are not very developed for the tourism. Also, making such places, tourist attraction can lead to dangerous end results. Furthermore, sunlight is also available for a limited time and survival in such cold atmosphere is very costly and risky. Due to climate change ice from the south pole has staring to melt and tourism development fasten this melting process which further causes natural disasters due to rise in sea water level.

Secondly, today wild life is in the high risk. Animals play an important role in balancing the natural life cycle. So, if we convert remote area in to travel place than we are keeping wildlife at more danger. Humans already destroyed most of the forest from the earth in order to use the land foe the infrastructure and use the wood for so many uses. If we further cut the jungles and open the land for tourism than wild animal will not have their natural habitat. For example, Amazon rain-forest is one of the huge forest where many wild animals live. If in this forest people start visiting than animal life gets interrupted and affected negatively.

Lastly, if the government allows to do research on the remote natural environment, it will cost high and it might cause a war. For example, every nation wants to use the substances which are present below the Atlantic Ocean. If they remove material from the sea than conflicts arise, and which might bring calamities because it imbalance the sea water level.

In conclusion, exploring the remote area brings more demerits compare to the merits to the society. Such as, natural calamity, economy and lifestyle of the animals will imbalance.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99044585987 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53107787857 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595541401274 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.542839435 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4736842105 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233663986391 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065061796266 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753490656465 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110453072469 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774118351911 0.0645574589148 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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