Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents
were children.
Some people argue that life was easier and more comfortable when their grandparents were children than what their lives are now. They cite the absence of mobile phones and computers that increased familial bonding to support their point. However, I strongly believe that life today is much easier to live through comfortably than what our grandparents had as children.
First of all, the advancement of technology has made the world come closer to us. For instance, when I was studying engineering in the United States, I would reach out to my family members back in India through video calls and text messages. This was a great source of comfort to me and helped me through bouts of homesickness that international students often feel. On the other hand, when our grandparents went someplace away from their families when they were children, there were no mobile phones or the internet for them to contact their parents. They had to wait days to receive letters from their loved ones. This example illustrates how easy our life has become because of the improvement in technology.
Secondly, in recent years, medical science has improved by leaps and bounds, again, with the help of technology. Almost all diseases and ailments are now treatable without the fear of loss of life. For instance, last year, my grandfather, who is 76 years old, fell down a flight of stairs and injured his spinal cord. He was rushed to the hospital and after some surgeries and extensive physiotherapy, now he has completely recovered and even goes for runs in the park. If something like this had happened to any older person in the years when my grandfather was a child, there might not have been much that the doctors could have done because of the lack of highly precise medical instruments like the MRI and CT scan. This example succinctly points out the advantages of comfortable living in the twenty-first century.
The issue of whether life when our grandparents were children versus life today, is easier and more comfortable, remains a complex one. Some people could argue that our grandparents as children used to play in the fields with other children instead of being glued to the screens like today’s children are, and thus led an active life. Nevertheless, I still contend that life today is easier and more comfortable, especially because of the advent of technology and science.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for instance, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9775 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66818173107 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3552229446 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.611111111 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42956716092 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122655019292 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150168030046 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279731607693 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159276990324 0.0645574589148 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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