Many people are afraid of leaving their houses because of the spread of crimes. Some think that more actions can be taken to prevent crime from occurring, but others think little can be done. What is your opinion?
“fear of crimes ruins the daily lives” Tara Westover, Educated, 2018. Can people stay at their home due to fear of crimes? Although believing little can be taken to prevent crime from occurring, others think that there are various actions which should be taken to halter crime. As far as I am concerned, I think more actions can be taken to slacken crime from occurring such as increasing police forces, improving education, and providing adequate decent jobs in the society. In the following, I am inclined to put forth some arguments to support my reasons.
First and foremost, it is a conventional wisdom that policeman’s arresting felons and thefts reduces the crime rate effectively. For example, according to an official statistics germane to the prisons in the UK, not only can the harsh punishment reduce the crime rate in felons’ future but also provides an appropriate environment for other citizens. Thus, by increasing police forces the controls or surveillances on the felons will be bolstered, and as a result, along with arrest and punishment, the crime rate will take a nosedive.
Another thing coming to my mind is that education take center stage in providing adequate background for people to ponder over their actions’ consequences as much as possible. As an illustrated case, UT Southwestern University’s surveys shed light on roles of education in reducing crime rate. The results were impressive. In countries that the citizens receive adequate education, the crime rate is kept in a standstill. On the other hand, in various poor regions with weak educational goals, the crime rate is escalating. Thus, it seems fair to advice governments to provide adequate education for their citizens to cut the crime rate effectively.
Last but not least, there is an indirect or reverse relationship between jobs availability and the crime rate. In other words, in societies with low available jobs, the crime rate will be increased because people need the jobs to pay their own and without those, they will be inclined to do crimes. Therefore, by providing adequate, decent jobs, the government could mitigate the crime rate efficiently.
To wrap things up, despite some people think to stay in their home could provide safety for them and they should not go to no-go-areas, others believe that there are various actions to be taken to reduce crime rate: augmenting policeman, amending education, and providing decent jobs for residents can mitigate crime rate drastically.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, still, therefore, thus, another thing, for example, i think, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26732673267 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94502033774 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527227722772 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.7782200977 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.222222222 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287354441345 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950171353863 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111587548141 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180171895732 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12069324594 0.0645574589148 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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