Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
" Doing exercise and physical activities increase people’s tendency to a healthy life" Tara Westover, Educated, 2008. Although some people believe that sports or social activities are not important than classes and libraries and should not receive equal financial support, I beg to differ. In my opinion, at universities and colleges, sports and social should receive equal financial supports because they not only could increase students' abilities but also help them to make friends. As well as, sports and social activities aid students to be healthy. In the following, I would like to put forth my schemes and reasons.
First and foremost, according to the recent studies, it has been proven that social activities and sports increase students' abilities in their society, so colleges and universities should pay more attention to support sports and social activities financially. For example, doing sports improves students' communication skills and promote them to do a collaboration. One of the part-and-parcel goals of colleges or universities is reviving students' teamwork sense. Thus, by adequate supporting sports and social activities by colleges or universities, in comparison with classes and libraries' financial support, students' teamwork could be improved.
Another thing coming to my mind to substantiate my stand is that universities' spending on financial aides to support sports or social activities expand students' chance to make friends. Not only could make friends help students but also it can reduce their stress level. Furthermore, making friends by students halters neuropsychiatric disorders' incidence. It has been elucidated that friends take center stage in reducing others’ stress. Therefore, it seems fair to suggest that colleges’ supporting financial to sports and social activities have more weight than spending money on libraries and classes.
Last but not least, in the lethargic world, doing sports or bolstering social activates helps students to be healthy. Students' doing exercise or social activities augment Cortisol hormone in their blood, as well as, help their brain to escalate its connectivity. In sum, it seems that universities or colleges should pay more financial support for sports and social activities than costing money on classes or libraries.
In conclusion, nevertheless some people think that educational institutes such as colleges or universities should spend more money on classes or libraries, I think that sports or social activities should take equal financial support. It can expand the students' abilities, healthy conditions, and chances to make friends. Is it an appropriate time to think about the financial supports on sports or social activities?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, another thing, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2342.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.72616136919 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01560672897 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457212713936 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7909435947 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.1 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.45 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38517463798 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134490833051 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112357298504 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256315635188 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699193466817 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.95 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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