Many things can influence the academic achievement and emotional growth of a student In this regard beers have more of an impact that teachers do To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
Nature is full of changes and so is human society. During the past decades, more and more people are becoming enthusiastic in offering supports to those who are in difficulties through donation. In this article, I will illustrate the reasons behind this phenomenon from two aspects.
First, we should contribute the trend of this development to the prosperity of economy. In the old days, technology stayed at a low level and work efficiency was limited. Despite the hard work, the majority of people could only make a living for survival. As a result, giving money or materials to those who were in need was merely a dream. Thanks to the rapid development of science and technology, many countries, in particular the developing countries, have realized modernization in different fields, so that people’s living standard has been greatly raised. Driven by different purposes, more people choose to donate part of their belongs, such as money or possessions, to help others. For example, one of my father’s friends was a successful business person. After he retired, he rented an apartment which he changed into a small library for hundreds of children to use in his community. Seeing teenagers reading attentively in the library after class, he felt satisfied with a sense of achievement.
Moreover, the behavior of providing disadvantaged groups with unselfish support can be attributed to the spread of universal love. One of the results generated by globalization seems to be the melting and integration of values of people from different cultures. With the quick spread of Christianity, more and more people begin to accept the idea of universal love expressed in the Bible, which encourages a person to give help to others who are in need disregarding age, gender, color or ethnic background. According to their understanding, only by doing so could they get closer to God and live peacefully in Heaven after they die. One typical way to show universal love is by donating money, clothing or food. Not only religious people have this awareness of giving love to others, people without religious belief also recognize the importance of universal love because they claim that through advocating helping people in difficulties a mutual understanding of people and social stability can be reached, which happens to be the pursuit of most governments in the world.
Overall, based upon the analysis above, it can be concluded that it is not a coincidence to the quick increase of people who are willing to help others. Such rise is driven by both economic development and the spread of universal love.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, for example, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13583138173 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91482074618 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555035128806 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0426632384 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.65 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.35 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0998926033349 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0275918445322 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294493327541 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0619371794804 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301577622459 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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