I agree with the statement saying that modern transportation and shipping led us to live in a better life. I consider this through my experience that make me fulfilled and convinience due to the development of modern technology and transportation industry. The following paragraphs are supporting my opinion.
First, I would focus on the economics benefit through those invention. It emphasizes us to reach overseas products market easily so we have been import and export more than back in the days. For example, Japan is one of the stable economy growth country in Asia because they know how to manage static business. They have firms in China or Vietnam which is the place they could hire employee cheaper than Japan. Also, the population of these country are bigger than Japan thus it actually helps local people to have job opportunities to sustain their own life. After the pruducts assembled by local employee, it distributes to Japan and also all over the country in the world by plane, ship, car, and even train. It obviously makes our economy better and efficiently to do business.
Second, the transportation especially plane and ship let us to have liberated life. There has been many news related to about segrigation and scorn to other country everyday and many people are sick to hear about it. However, many people try to understand different cultures and history so it would make more opportunity to eliminate thoughts like segligation. For instance, I have studied in Finland as exchange. One day, I had discussion about marketing proccess in the lecture with over 10 students came from different country. Everyone have opinions in defferent and we persuaded each other with actual cases in our own country. It was so fun to exchange issues and at the end of the discussion, we expanded our perspective together. Therefore, I would say that travelling, studying abroad, or business trip would take you to another place which you have never been to before. It helps you to understand diversity society without any concern such as racism or discrimination.
All of considered, I would say the development of modern transportation and shipping made a good effect to our life. It has been a succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this invention' or 'those inventions'?
Suggestion: this invention; those inventions
... focus on the economics benefit through those invention. It emphasizes us to reach overseas pro...
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Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
... to have liberated life. There has been many news related to about segrigation and s...
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Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
... to have liberated life. There has been many news related to about segrigation and scorn ...
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Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... segrigation and scorn to other country everyday and many people are sick to hear about ...
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Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... a good effect to our life. It has been a succeed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0243902439 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84894104311 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577235772358 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0430250612 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2857142857 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198504441138 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512112782893 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905640904418 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15165107772 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958884120221 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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