Money can not buy happiness
Some people argue that money can buy happiness, probably they are under the impression that happiness can only be found in the materialistic things. I disagree with the stance for three reasons.
First of all, money can never be the main determinant behind happiness because happiness lies in contentment. A person may have a lot of money and still be unhappy. For example, a person can make money by following ill manners, but this money can sometimes takes him to further difficulties. A person, who incomes a little money in an honest way can be more happy than the former one only because he is happy with what he have. Contentment and gratitude is essential for mental peace and happiness. That's why money can not decide a person's happy state.
Secondly, money can never bring happiness because happiness can be found in simple and smaller things. For example, spending time with parents can take away mood swings and depression. Walking in a park, having a hobby keep people, travelling in a new place can bring happiness which can not be found in monetary ways. People who do not know how to find happiness in simple things, can never be happy in a true sense. In today's world family value is decreasing, and number of unhappy people is increasing. That's why practicing family values, which involves no money, can bring happiness.
At last, money can never buy real happiness because real happiness relates to experience. For example, a person can be happy by just walking in the rain with his dear . one. On the other hand, a businessman can have a lot of money as well as not having a single friend. It is experience, memory with our social people that make our life worth living for, give us immense pleasure. That's why I believe money can not buy happiness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73139158576 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55866445391 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533980582524 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5973907662 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.9473684211 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2631578947 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.593871883575 0.236089414692 252% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.21941926909 0.076458572812 287% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15881132966 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.422594919377 0.150856017488 280% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425086443058 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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