With the rapid development of medias, all kinds of advertisements have become very common in our daily life. While some people may like them, for they offer some kind of guidance for shopping, others tend to blame them for false publicity. In my opinion, most advertisements are overselling their product. They all use all kind of tricks to make the products look so much better than they really are in order to attract potential buyers.
First of all, most food advertisements are not honest. Most food advertisements we see on TV these days use scenes like a beautiful farm or meadows with sunshine to make the viewers feel that their food is natural and pure, while in fact, all the food is just produced in a factory with machines and has nothing to do with all the beautiful stuff shown in the advertisements. I remember a very old advertisement, using scenes like spring water and glacier melting in the South Pole to make the bottled water they are selling look pure and fresh.But in fact, as I have found out after a trip to their local factory, the bottled water in the commercial is just produced in big tin tank like any other similar water products, which has nothing to do with spring nor glaciers.
Medicine commercials, just like food advertisements, are just other great examples of how modern advertisements mislead their potential customers.I believe that most of us have seen those commercials on TV that someone who’s very sick takes the pills and just shake off all sickness, and becomes all happy and energetic. Those commercials can be very misleading because first of all, as a doctor once told me, there’s no way that someone can shake off his or her sickness in such a short time no matter what kind of pills were taken. Also, taking medicine is a serious thing, requiring a lot of help and direction from doctors.In those commercials, however, taking medicine becomes a simple and happy process. It can really mislead some people, especially young kids, making them taking their medication lightly.
There’s no denying that commercial can be really helpful in helping us to learn something about products on the market, thus making more informative choices when shopping. Howevet, there’s also no doubt that most of the adveritsements are designed to be misleading. We should be aware and try not to be fooled by the lies told in those advertisements.
To sum up, advertisements can be really dishonest these days when it comes to promoting their products, and things are extremely bad in areas like food and medicine. We should be aware of them and try not to be misguided by their lies, while enjoying the convenience and information they bring us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, really, so, thus, while, in fact, kind of, no doubt, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90849673203 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83156687062 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511982570806 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.7554100555 48.9658058833 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.8125 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6875 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201157181219 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795299439008 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872514324017 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117330294387 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847814114257 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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