Movies and television strongly influence the way people behave. Do you agree or disagree? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
The impact of watching TV. has been a controversial debate in modern society, since the crime rate started to increase a decade ago. I believe the movies and television have a significant effect on people's behavior. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, there is no doubt that the TV. has a strong influence on everyone's life as it could hurt the way people behave. Indeed, the violence between kids in school started to increase these days than before. Most of the rule models on the TV. shows began to introduce violence as a popular behave, moreover as a predominant, and cool lifestyle. For example, I remember when I was in high school in Egypt, one of my friends was a big fan of a famous actor. Since this actor started to provide an extreme violance in his movies, my friend acted like him and started to treat the others in a bad way. Of course, that was not acceptable in school. As a result, he got punished, and his grades became low. Therefore, after graduation, he was not qualified for college, and his opportunity to work in a decent job decreased.
Secondly, watching TV. has a stressful effect on our life as that makes our mind exhausted. Certainly, watching television for a long time would affect our health negatively. I recently read research in the New York Times that mentioned that staring on the TV.'s screen for a long time would affect our brain nerves and would cause inflammations. My son's experience is a good example of this. I have a four-year-old boy his name is Raphael. He likes to watch cartoons on his tablet. When he is spending a long time staring on the screen, once he is done, he starts to act inappropriately. For instance, he screams too loud, runs jumps everywhere, and so on. After I read that article, I held him and asked him about what he was feeling. Certainly, he said that he was tired. As a result, I decided to give him a limited time to watch and offered a lot of other activities to do besides.
To sum up, there is no doubt that the effect of movies and television is so significant in everyone's life. On one hand that could harm people's behavior. On the other hand that hurts our health as that has a stressful impact on our minds.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: have
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
... our health negatively. I recently read a research that mentioned that staring on the advi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i feel, no doubt, of course, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47815533981 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59595179783 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51213592233 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7809461385 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.6206896552 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2068965517 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.62068965517 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.098493712489 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254304187041 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441584480905 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691659306884 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288152887788 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.11 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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