In Korea, movies and TV programs are popular with many people. People are unconsciously affected by those media in many ways regardless of their positivity and negativity. I insist that movies and TV programs have a vast impact on peoples’ behavior for two elaborated reasons. I will explore those reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, people have been exposed to negative aspects of those media. Violent actions from the movie and sexual or uncommon behaviors from the TV programs can give a negative effect on people. To be specific, some movies including brutal action scenes an encourage teenagers to mimic those scenes. This can arouse a controversial situation in society. For example, there is a Japanese movie named ‘Crows Zero.’ In that movie, high school students fight to achieve the throne of their high school like a yakuza. They neither attend their classes and nor obey the rules of local society. Once when I was in my school years, there was a boom for this movie. Everyone imitate the characters of that movie because people in my school thought that is cool at that time. However, today, most students have been regretting that time due to their acceptance that those actions are merely bullying and not suitable for students.
On top of that, movies and television programs also can give positive effects on people. The arrival of celebrities and influencers on those media makes people mimic their positive activities. That is the reason why many un-profitable organizations use top-stars as their commercial models. People easily can be encouraged by them thanks to their desire to resemble those celebrities. To be specific, a female sing-a-song writer named IU appeared at a TV show in Korea. The purpose of that show was to gather a specific amount of money for refugees. However, the program always failed to fulfill their expectations due to the fact that people were not interested in that show. However, the influence of IU, the top-tier K-pop star, reversed the reputation of the show and make people donate their money to follow IUs’ positive action. As a result, the program scored the highest donation rate in its history.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that TV shows and movies can affect people in both positive and negative ways. Therefore, I insist that the existence of those media is one of the strong components which encourage peoples’ behaviors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05263157895 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66443034727 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531328320802 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.356876166 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.625 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161497133791 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471841842618 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332190197709 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110239631163 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278530810885 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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