Movies and Televisions make more negative effects than positive effects on young people’s behavior

In the modern era, media is regarded as a crucial factor contributing to the different facets of human's life. One of the heated debates in this realm is associated with the effects of television on our attitudes. Many people adhere to the view that they have plenty of advantages that facilitate our lives, while others believe that they are destructive and make us miserable. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that television has disturbing impacts on us. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.

The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the visual media has awful influences on teenagers. As we can see, they spend a noticeable portion of their spare time sitting in front of the tv not thinking about their homework. As a result, they will fail their tests and not become successful in their academic lives. My own experience is a compelling example of this. During elementary school, I used to watch tv after school until midnight. I found all programs interesting so that I voraciously kept watching them. Consequently, I did not have adequate time and energy to do my school duties because I felt asleep and could not concentrate on the subjects. My average became significantly low so that school manager asked my parents and talk to them about my bad grades. My family decided to ban me from watching tv, and my grades went back to normal.

The other equally significant point to be mentioned is that movies, especially action movies with fight scenes, increase the violence in society. Being exposed to those programs, people unconsciously develop aggression in their minds, and they begin injecting these feelings to the society. Gradually, others adapt these characteristics as well, so we will observe excessive violence in our surrounding environment. For instance, about ten years ago, our national television broadcasted a series in which a group of people jumped on each other when they wanted to start a fight. People found this behavior ammuzing, thus they tried to start a practical joke with it sometimes. Although they did not intended it to be serious, their actions led to serious fights with actual injuries. Thus, I think if it was not for that show, we would not observe such behaviors in community.

In brief, contemplation all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that the disadvantages of television is more than its benefits. Because it causes youngsters not to pay attention to their studies, also make aggression ubiquitous through the society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 700, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'intend'
Suggestion: intend
...ith it sometimes. Although they did not intended it to be serious, their actions led to ...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, thus, well, while, for instance, i think, in brief, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0091954023 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84369395734 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590804597701 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.548171739 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.7391304348 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9130434783 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106984559926 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.027427641876 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387458337347 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717527286809 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434183667702 0.0645574589148 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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