movies and televisions strongly influence the way people behave.do you agree or disagree
In the Cold War trenches, 33th America's president harry s Truman started a new method to overcome the united states' arch-rival, the soviet-union. This method nowadays is called propaganda, which means; changing the way of thinking and reasoning of society with the help of public media and advertisements. While some politicians ignored the influences of public media, new evidence has admited their tremendous effects. In my view, movies and television have many impacts on people's minds and behavior for two main reasons.
Firstly, with the leverage of public media, dangerous activities can be demonstrated as beneficial ones. For instance, justifying the use of nuclear power in 1960 is a good example. Television at that time was bombarding the public mind with the positive aspects of nuclear experiments. Politicians declared that this new achievement could be used as a treatment for cancer and related disorders. Hence, they filled the public mind with that notion which led to more investment in nuclear power projects, especially hydrogen bombs as a new tool against the soviet-union. Nevertheless, some years later, experiments stated that there is no direct relationship between cancer and nuclear radiation treatment. This was a famous example of propaganda and the hidden role of television and media, which can effectively alter the public.
Secondly, media and movies can shape the mental and physical condition of people drastically. Pieces of evidence have shown that teenagers who spend more than 3 hours of the day on movies and television are at the risk of onset depression, anxiety, and other mental disorders, three folds than those who spend lesser time. Since movies focus on expensive superstars with outstanding beauty, the juveniles mostly envy the actor, and this leads to a condition called lack of self-esteem, and low self-esteem is the cornerstone of many mental disorders.
In conclusion, from my perspective, television and movies can strongly impact the public mind and behavior with two main methods. First, by focusing only on the positive sides of a dangerous project or activity more than its negative ones, and investing vast amounts of money in superstars and handsome actors.so I recommend that you not believe everything on television.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38718662953 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93071160948 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58217270195 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5693563984 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.875 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127101348337 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041287106578 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449168455801 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815066754988 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03319426152 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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