. Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
• Being helpful
• Being honest
• Being well-organized.
The staggering progress of societies in today’s convoluted world is clear to everyone, and it is erected upon strong underpinning: the nurture of children. A controversial debate ignites enthusiasm toward this topical issue that which redeeming feature should be taught in five to ten years old children: being helpful, being honest, or being well-organized. Yet to the best of my knowledge, I side with people in favor third option, being well disciplined. In the following paragraphs, I delineate my standpoint.
First and foremost, what provokes children to be disciplined in their future life is that they should be oriented to be well-organized when they are underage. It is crystal clear that this feature is extremely considered by first-world, developed countries such as Japan so as to learn their offspring become well-disciplined at the very first year. Due to this critical juncture of life, 5-10-year-old children, they are more receptive to assorted methods of upbringing, cultivating them to interact simultaneously what they learn; for example, avoid making their room messy with their toys, or do their assignment in their due time. Moreover, it has been acknowledged by behavioral scientist that the fundamental children’s character is formed in the first decade of their lifespan. The more time passes, the more children become oriented and well-organized as they have been taught by their parents or teachers. Being well-organized, children learn to be honest as well as helpful since this invaluable feature would have far-reaching repercussion in every aspect of their personality and behavior.
What is more, the sustained growth of a country rests on the well-disciplined people. It stands to the reason that countries need to progress across the board in terms of technology, education, social, political, economic aspects, to name but a few. So, this breakthrough should be attained through specific, scheduled programs; the presence of which should be considered alike so as to eliminate any undue delay in the path of success. Not until these targets would be fulfilled can well-disciplined, perseverance individuals are trained when they are children. Laying the hope of future developments to children, governments cannot shirk from the responsibility to finance them. Having considered all the benefits of prospect children’s roles in the most, not all, of countries, governments divert a considerable amount of budget to provide miscellaneous, efficacious training course for parents, pointing out to the fact that the critical, sufficient ground breeding should be catered by them for their offspring. In fact, these children are the cornerstone of progress in any given society.
In the final analysis, I have to reiterate my standpoint that it is better for 5-10-year-old children to be shared being well-organized. This is because children will be oriented to be disciplined in the future, and they will contribute to the progress of given society through consequential role related to being well-organized
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, third, thus, well, as to, for example, in fact, such as, as well as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51063829787 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3054846941 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540425531915 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.3999466008 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.315789474 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7368421053 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348999622384 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115141569085 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118185754412 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261726779284 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949324842854 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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