ome people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no denying fact that in modern society parents usually work full time to afford the basic needs of their children's life. So we need to overcome the negative effects of lacking closeness between the parents and their children by using the best methods to keep them in touch and make the best of their time. Depending on my personal experience, it is more advisable to allocate this limited time to school-related issues like doing homework. In the following essay, I will delve into my most prominent reasons for this viewpoint.
The main reason for my preference is that when parents get involved with the children's schoolwork, the children feel being observed by their positive role models which contributes to a bright future. In addition, they can get the help of their family members in some cases like solving a puzzle, and it provides them with a friendly entertaining time. My own experience demonstrates convincing evidence on this as my parents both had a full-time job, and we almost always used to talk about my schoolwork and the ways I could achieve my goals as a student so it resulted in my current fulfilling life as a young adult.
Besides, the further reason why I advocate the second belief is an improvement in the world of technology which has revolutionized the methods of learning and education. Not surprisingly, the learning process has combined with diverse entertainments that are both interesting and instructive. The most persuasive point is that by using these modern means of education like computers parents can also take advantage of learning new things and it is also a chance to both help their children learn more conveniently and play with them at the same time.
In a word, the busy parents need to recognize the new ways available for having useful times with their children and utilize the help of technology to make their time both interesting and educational. So it is more sagacious to allocate this time for schoolwork in an entertaining way that also guarantees their future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... in modern society parents usually work full time to afford the basic needs of their chil...
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Line 4, column 262, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an entertaining way" with adverb for "entertaining"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...us to allocate this time for schoolwork in an entertaining way that also guarantees their future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, second, so, in addition, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9387755102 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82440336625 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527696793003 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2125585636 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.166666667 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5833333333 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288081209981 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107632853082 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084661127812 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186326779402 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063814565034 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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