In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Being responsible is matters in all aspects of the life. One of this aspects is managing money. I think managing money is a duty for people. So, they have to learn this duty at young ages. I have plenty of reasons based on my own experiences, and I want to share them with you.
First of all, I think what people learn at their young age becomes a habit for them. Therefore, If they learn managing their money and saves they will manage their property in future. Kids and childre have no idea that money how obtains, and they are not aware of the difficulties of works. But parents can make them familiar with this issue, and they can explains to children that saving money is important. Adult can teach managing money to children with simple games. For example, they can say to their children that by collecting a determined money in one month, the children won a present. So, by a simple game children persuade to save money and use it in appropriate way.
Furthermore, kids and children are future parents. Managing money is a skil that they have to earn it. Real world is full of problems and sometimes these problemes are financial problems. For dealing with these financial hardships they must manage their money. For instanse, my wifes and I devide our salaries for 10 parts. We use one part to school costs of our kids. We buy books, clothes, toys, and other things for our children. We use another part of our salaries for paying house rent. Also, we use another parts of our salaries for our holidays, our insurance and other kind of things. Managing money is an important skill for having good condition in society. There are colorful advertisments in televisions, magazins and bllboards that catch the eyes, but we have to be reasonable and choose what is useful for us. If we spend our money for unnecessary things, it will affect to our future.
In a nutshell I want to say that managing money is important for everyone. I thinks it is a skill that we have earn it. In our society having this weapon is essential for having good situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ters in all aspects of the life. One of this aspects is managing money. I think mana...
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Line 2, column 110, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to manage'.
Suggestion: to manage
...abit for them. Therefore, If they learn managing their money and saves they will manage ...
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Line 2, column 173, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...d saves they will manage their property in future. Kids and childre have no idea that mon...
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Line 2, column 356, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'explain'
Suggestion: explain
... familiar with this issue, and they can explains to children that saving money is import...
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Line 2, column 534, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'determined money'.
Suggestion: determined money
...ay to their children that by collecting a determined money in one month, the children won a presen...
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Line 2, column 616, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'child'?
Suggestion: child
...ren won a present. So, by a simple game children persuade to save money and use it in ap...
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Line 2, column 634, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'saving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'persuade' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: saving
... So, by a simple game children persuade to save money and use it in appropriate way. ...
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Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...oys, and other things for our children. We use another part of our salaries for pa...
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Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...ging money is important for everyone. I thinks it is a skill that we have earn it. In ...
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Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'earned'.
Suggestion: earned
...ne. I thinks it is a skill that we have earn it. In our society having this weapon i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for example, i think, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1689.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58967391304 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46277670137 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48097826087 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4799340684 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.5555555556 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6296296296 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2518311239 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799409170108 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721441052069 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160556446032 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0972474388418 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.75 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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