Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of the doubt, children play a vital role in the society development and progress. Children are back bone of every community and their breeding is an important matter. Many people contends that playing computer games is not a big deal for children and we can allow them to play, while others asserts that playing is wasting time. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that playing games for children is nothing except wasting their valueable time. In the ensuing paragraphs, I delve into many reasons to substantiate my point.
The firs and possibly the paramount consequential reason is related to their time. Children spend almost most of their time in schools and there are a lot of suitable entertainment classes in the school.So, they can use these classes instead of wasting their time with computer games. Also, after school they have homoworks and assignments to do, and they have to do rheir tasks for obtaining good grades. Being succeed in school school is essentila for having good future. For example, I remember, when my brother was in high school he used to play with computer games and he ignored to do his homeworks. After a while, he failed in his exams. As a result he decided to leave these nonsense games and he focused on his lessons. So, I think playing computer games is wasting time.
Another point springing to mind is about obtaining skills and enhancment our abilities for entering to real world. Real world is full of challenging and we have to prepare to deal with all the difficulties. So, we have to spend our free time to learn a career. We can participate in different classes to reach this purpose. For instance, I participated in various classes related to my major during the summer to increase my abilities. These classes were helpful to my promotion in my job. So, I think spending our time to do precious works is better in comparison to playing games.
However, the said reasons are the first ones cross to the mind. A brilliant study found a corrolation between playing and solving puzzels. According to the study children who play games have better ability in solving puzzels and they are very creative in facing with problems. This investigation was done among 1000 families to avoid any bias. However, researchers have to do a lot of experiments for confirming data. If they can verify their data it will be an important matter that we have to notice that.
To sum it all up, by taking all the details into consideration, although there are benefits and defects relected to the subject, in my opinion, it is easy to see how the advantages of spending our time to do valuable works rather than playing games easily outweight the drawbacks. By spending our time to do our school duties or by spending time to enhance our skills we will be sucseed in our career. Also, a sucssed person causes the profress of the country.
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...lot of experiments for confirming data. If they can verify their data it will be a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2492.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77394636015 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62816538101 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490421455939 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.8400107009 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0666666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262204125666 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698184774979 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802647423213 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153365770938 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824571128854 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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