Technological hobbies are now a kind of predominant activities which have been playing a pivotal role in children’s' life from earlier till now the modern days. Some people believes that parent should abundant children from playing computer games which caused them to waste their time. However, others disagree. In my opinion engaging with this kind of activities lead children not to use their time in a useful manner. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, every youngster need to have some opportunity to get to be socialize with other people surrounded them. When children spend their time with their computer activities which is an individual activity, they would not have time to get to be in touch with other peoples. One of my own experience is a good case in point. I remember one they when I was a teenager and I was interested to spend ages on my computer. I was feeling like a girl who is live lonely and had not any friends since I was just sat on the sit and played lonely. The problem was that I had spent most of my time on my computer game and my friends never had gotten me in touch. these circumstances lead me to got to be alone and had never chance to be socialize with other peoples. what is important is that, I have learned some lesson from my experiences that if this circumstances will happen for my children, I would never forget to avoid her from involving with that kinds of activities.
Second, physical activates would help children to active their brain. when you are engrossing with silence activities like computer games. your mind will become less active.
research shows that most of the children’s who are more creative in their school time had spent their free time with their family like social activities which engage their bodies as well as their brain.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that playing computer game is a great waste of time for two reasons. It not only causes children become less social persons but also leads them become lees creative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71191135734 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57195615218 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509695290859 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6789693935 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5263157895 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234973825326 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773259650897 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719845688121 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140444947256 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594128388737 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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