Developing technology play a pivotl role in the mothern day life. Some people believes that tecnoligy has made individuals less creative. However, others disagree. In my opinion enhancing new technology in our children's life shows that they have become less creative. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, it is obviose that one of the most influence that technology brings in iur life i to create life easy which makes people to move less. when the internet makes a situation for people to do their work without going out or moving their body. as research shows lzed that If I ess movment of body have direct effect on less doing mind work. One of my own experience is a good case in poin. I have one children which is realy computer adicted. in some ways I cant even speak with her and she is always prefer to share her entertainment on watching movi or playing game on a camputer with her friends. at the end of the year I have realiesed that she wre not such a creative person that she was before she had known the internet games. this example clearly illustrates that how internet could effect on becoming less creative persons.
Second, in this days Google websites is the most and great source of information website which is alwayes in access of every one. when you have a souce like google you will never use your mind befor sorting your problem by yourself. For example, I remember that during studing in univerity I had found most of my key answering question in goole which had never gav me the chance to thinke about my problem and figure out some solution by myself. afte I had grauated I have realzied that If I had soleved my queastion before using google I would have got a creative mind now. This example clearly illustarates that some interenet web site will abound you to have a chance to think and active your brain.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that technology has provied somme negetive effect which leads children become less creative. It not only has bought children's body less active but also has omited the opourtunity for children to think and solve their problem without using the Internet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6511627907 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41157407001 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542635658915 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3984734755 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166204291865 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500355933617 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385219565911 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108520767986 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284333570731 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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