Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

Parents play a pivotal role in the developing of education in childrens' life. Some parents who has a job believe that the best use of the time with children is to have fun playing games however, others believe that is better to doing things which are related to their schoolwork. In my opinion the best way to do is the work which are related to their school work. I feel this way for two reasons which i will explore in the following essay.
First, parents have a reletively controle on their childrens' education in their extra time. When you enrrole your children to the school their teacher ask you to help and review your children's school to reinforce your children educating. One of my friend's experience is a good case in point. I have a friend who has had 3 children. She is very busy as she has worked five day a weak thus she has not enough time to spent with her children. One day the teacher of her douter asked her to inform about her douter's study which was not good. My friend call me and I knew that she was so upset because she could not spend enough time to helped and managed her douter's education . This example clearly illustrates that the lees attention parent to the schoolworks of children the less developing showed in their educating.
Second, parents are the best person who can decling their childrens's stress when they have an exam in school. If you do not spend enough time with your children to give them feel happy they feel much presure when they are in a hard situation. My own experince is a good case in point. I was the second children in my family. My parents were working 10 hour a day. they have never noticed when I was in prusure. I allways have esteres before my exam becaouse they have never been at home to decline my stres therefor I pass my exam not so good however My close friend allways was happy after her exam because her mother allways spend time with her before the exam. This example clearly illustrates that how much parents could decline their stress of their children during their exam's time.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that when busy parent do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of time is helping their school's homworks. It not only managing their study but also diminish their presure of their exam time.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47980997625 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25845172834 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439429928741 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6540585474 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7272727273 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1363636364 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418777269737 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134653973594 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164414907756 0.0737576698707 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.326991720605 0.150856017488 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14080245582 0.0645574589148 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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