Developing technology play a pivotal role in the modern day life. Some people believes that technology has made individuals less creative. However, others disagree. In my opinion enhancing new technology in our children's life shows that they have become less creative. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, it is obvious that one of the most influence that technology brings in our life I to create life easy which makes people to move less. when the internet makes a situation for people to do their work without going out or moving their body. as research shows lzed that If I less movement of body have direct effect on less doing mind work. One of my own experience is a good case in point. I have one children which is really computer addicted. in some ways I can’t even speak with her and she is always preferring to share her entertainment on watching movie or playing game on a computer with her friends. at the end of the year I have realized that she was not such a creative person that she was before she had known the internet games. this example clearly illustrates that how internet could effect on becoming less creative persons.
Second, in this days Google websites is the most and great source of information website which is always in access of every one. when you have a source like google you will never use your mind before sorting your problem by yourself. For example, I remember that during studding in university I had found most of my key answering question in google which had never given me the chance to think about my problem and figure out some solution by myself. after I had graduated I have realized that If I had solved my question before using google I would have got a creative mind now. This example clearly illustrates that some Internet web site will abound you to have a chance to think and active your brain.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that technology has provide some negative effect which leads children become less creative. It not only has bought children's body less active but also has omitted the opportunity for children to think and solve their problem without using the Internet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69509043928 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44472577061 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503875968992 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2217141233 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.85 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169653227842 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537395389616 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041401471582 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113136634262 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336010062995 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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