TPO9- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Coincident with what many people note about the negative effects of technology on the creativity of children, I strongly believe that parents should limit their children's access to high-tech devices. Here are a short list of my reasons.
To begin with, it is worthy to mention that brain growth in human being dramatically accelerated as the process of socialization improved. This model can be referred to children, as well. They can learn a variety of behavioral lessons in exposure to environment, other children and new experiences in real life. Through such experiences, innovation and creativity can be generated and raised. If a father surrounds his child with a number of smart devices to avoid his kid's boredom and fussing, the kid would probably miss the chance of becoming a sociable and creative person in future.
Secondly, it is theorized that technology can bring impatience to humans as Dr. Moray, PhD, a psychologist based in Boston, says. In this modern era that everything is readily accessible in favor of technology, people are used to obtain whatever they demand as fast as possible. Children cannot be an exception in this regard. They can easily skip the stages of video games or access to their favorite cartoon in a blink. They will not learn to wait for their desires. This can show itself in their personalities. Children with such histories are not patient nor creative enough to spend hours and hours on finding new solutions for inevitable obstacles of life.
Last but not least, although technology has led to undeniable benefits in nurture of children, little creatures who we usually find as genius brains, it could negatively affect their creativity by decreasing their social interaction and patience.
- TPO9 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- TPO 10 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Playing computer games is a waste of time Children should not be allowed to play them Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- TPO26 It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 578, Rule ID: IN_PAST
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...becoming a sociable and creative person in future. Secondly, it is theorized that te...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, well, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 284.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16549295775 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83067714314 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637323943662 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3747233174 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141245046737 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435517297428 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0274995780434 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867218278041 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166716726583 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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