TPO 30- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern and sophisticated world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye on the significant effect of leisure time on the people's quality of life. In this regard, some are inclined toward the opinion to reduce the weekly working days and increase daily working hours instead. As far as I am concerned, I believe there are both advantages and adverse effects for this idea and I will vindicate my viewpoints in the following passage.
First, more off days provide an ideal opportunity for the employees to spend an enjoyable time with their family and friends .In other words, as employees are usually preoccupied with their careers, they possess few chances to have fun with their children and beloved ones. However, working for less than half of a week, people can enjoy their life and pursue their dreams by doing their hobbies and favorite entertainments. This can promote peoples energy and concentration at work as they are already pleased and fulfilled in their private lives. Personally speaking, when I was working for a great electronic company, I had few time for my personal life. I could hardly take enough attention to my family. Meanwhile, whenever I could have fun with my family in holidays, I would obviously witness a significant increase in my efficiency at work. If I had not had enjoyed my free time, I would not have succeeded in following days at working productively.
On the other hand, decreasing the working days can put the companies in some troubles, as well. Working for long hours in a day could lead to enhanced risk and probability of making mistakes as a result of tiredness and frustration. In addition, famous and big firms might put their staff under pressure to work more in order to keep the company at the optimal status. This could be wearisome and bring side effects, though. The more the workers be enforced to work inexhaustibly, the more the technical errors and defects might arise in the entire the system.
In light of aforementioned reasons, reducing the working days could act like a two side sword. It could be beneficial by increasing the employees' quality of life and consequently being more productive at work, or it could be destructive by enhancing the occurrence of human errors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, so, well, while, in addition, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89295039164 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76357406027 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548302872063 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1432479953 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.235294118 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5294117647 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245148473682 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805031879021 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547802697839 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140568462146 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430430925724 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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