Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern and industrialized world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant and rapid alteration of the world. This quick change can enormously affect people's satisfactions in their lives. Personally, I believe that people are happier nowadays than were in previous decades. In this passage, I will explore two reasons to vindicate my viewpoints.
First, modern technology and sophisticated systems have played an important role in people's lives since the date they entered this world. In other words, electronic devices and intelligent robots have made this life considerably easy. Take a housewife as an example. In past, women had to take the burden to clean the house, wash the dishes and the clothes, bring water from the rivers and take care of children simultaneously. Doing all these burdensome housework, women could rarely enjoy their lives. In contrast, today with the invention of all types of electronic devices and facilities, people can easily depend on the technology and enjoy their time having fun with family and friends. Therefore, the less labor, the more feeling of happiness and satisfaction.
Second, people can easily connect each other in this modernized world. The world has become a village thanks to the technology and people can easily communicate beyond the boundaries. When people have the ability to talk to their beloved ones through the internet without the limitation of distance or timing schedule, they will feel more consent and delightfulness. Talking more personally, my uncle has lived in another country since 40 years ago. We used to write letters to each other in order to stay in touch. Definitely, this type of communication was not our favorite due to its difficult process; however, we had no other options. Recently, though, with the undeniable effect of social media, we can easily connect and talk without any limitations. We can simply share our moments as if we were living together. If the internet had not provided us the ability to connect, we could not have built such great memories together.
To put it in a nutshell, I believe people, currently, are happier and more satisfied with their lives. Developing technology not only does help them to live easier, but it can also reduce the pressure of distances by connecting people in a second.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'In the past'?
Suggestion: In the past
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, in contrast, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10966057441 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78199873062 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574412532637 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8275206981 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9545454545 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4090909091 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68181818182 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198119165156 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580256998782 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475633717952 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130743608633 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285058121827 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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