Living through modern technology invent an environment that inspires every individual to change their lifestyle and compose a new approach in their duty of life. the social network, cell phone, and online game are such a new technology that today are used in every home. Some people believe that being this kind of thing among studying make education harder than before. However, others disagree. In my view, such technologies are not only useful for children but have a positive effect on their studying process. I fell this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, every student has now needed to have some entertainment which could help and prepare their mind fresh and active due to having a better study time. If students get involve with such technological networks, they will get a chance to have well educated time. Study shows that students who do not just spend their time on reading and manage their opportunities to make the most of their time are more successful than others who just reed their book and never use such these social networks. these results illustrate how such technological entertainment has positive effects on children’s education.
Second, there are some benefits of using social networks among studying time. we can’t omit this sheer truth that technology made a circumstance to control and save your time throughout the action. children can have their vacation during their studies by staying at home but communicating with their friends. On the other hand, they can save time and spend it in their reading. My own experience is a good case in point. when I was studying at university the pandemic infection had been distributed among worlds which forces every government to nuked down the cities thus nobody must see each other until that remains. The most important event was that I had just a chance to have a connection with my friends by my cellphone which I realized that it was helped me to not only have such entertainment communication but also my time had been saved, which was pretty useful.
In conclusion, I utterly disagree with the statement that cell phones, online games, and social networking Websites make study harder. It does not only save the children's time to study but also gave them such energy to boost their studying.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, well, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96675191816 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58617984961 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554987212276 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1447595647 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.210526316 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172307250507 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061458545404 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617630466642 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115772690578 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138719366427 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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