Living in a competition and well-developed countries forces indivijuals to work more than their extent of their abilities. In this regards people are going to experienc different job oppourtunities. Some peoples believe that working in different area not only wont be beneficial but make people get on desorates. However, others disagree. As far as I am concern diffrent work will couse the results become adversly. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, modern contries need experts in differets skills. working in diffrets objects lessend the oppourtinities to spend time in an explicit skils, and the number of elaboretaed person will have been reduced If people do not concentrates on one craft. One of my own experien is a good case in poin. I have been working in an enginering company as an urbanplanner expert for more than ten years and during this time I have been working on one specific project which help me to spent enough time to become an expert in my area. However, my older roomate which have been started her job before me is loosing his job over and over becaouse he could not doing his job well in his area. The most important reason was that his working on differet job which leads him to be not seccecful enev at one of them. Ths example clearly illustrates that If he did not spend his time on multiple job, He would have been an expert today.
Second, it is a nececerie requirment for every person who is started job to have concentration, infact without focousing on your tasks and duty you will lose to achieve well results. Doing in diffrent project will couse to loos concentration.One research examin an experiment on diffrent stuff in a big company which the results is realy inspiration. research shows that the number of people who just focous on one project is much higher in comparison with other group that working in different projects in the same time. This experiment clearly shows that being concentrate on one job will help to gain more prosperous.
In conclusion, I firmly agree with the statement that people who work on lots of job are not seccesful as people who work in one job. It is not only couse them won't be expert but also coese them won't concentrates.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on desorates. However, others disagree. As far as I am concern diffrent work will ...
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Suggestion: Working
...tries need experts in differets skills. working in diffrets objects lessend the oppourt...
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Message: Did you mean 'concentrate'?
Suggestion: concentrate
...will have been reduced If people do not concentrates on one craft. One of my own experien is...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
...job over and over becaouse he could not doing his job well in his area. The most impo...
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Suggestion:
... tasks and duty you will lose to achieve well results. Doing in diffrent project ...
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Suggestion: One
...roject will couse to loos concentration.One research examin an experiment on diffre...
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Suggestion: Research
...which the results is realy inspiration. research shows that the number of people who jus...
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Suggestion: lots of jobs
...h the statement that people who work on lots of job are not seccesful as people who work in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72405063291 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70841117765 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508860759494 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5595823356 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2105263158 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111613652971 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0350803060351 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312860192621 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745911216689 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0099487845025 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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