People are spending their life with many different kinds of activities. Life has different sorts of dimension like work, family, and such like; which confronting people on a daily basis. They try to manage various responsibilities in order to be much more effective in their life however, this situation leads them to do very few things right. I fell this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, doing many different things needs much more time. (first, involving with wide variety of works is time consuming). As we know each work takes specific time for doing, while if we couldn't spend enough time, the work couldn't be done completely. for example, I remember that when I was student in my university I had to do some work such as studying, working part time job and attending to music class. I had a lot of work to do but not enough time though I had to stop working as I should pass my exam so I couldn't do different things because of limited my time my limited time.
for engagement to several activities, an individual requires physical and mental preparation. It means that the better someone prepared, the better his works accomplished. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I had two jobs one is my basic job in the office and other is my second job in evenings in the restaurant as a waitress. This circumstances led to my extreme mental and physical tiredness which had jeopardized both of my carrier due to my bad performance.
In conclusion, I strongly agree with the statement which when people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. For two reasons. First, lake of enough time. Second, physical and mental preparation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 37, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
People are spending their life with many different kinds of activities. Life has different...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...e in the following essay. First, doing many different things needs much more time. first, inv...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
... different things needs much more time. first, involving with wide variety of works i...
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Line 2, column 184, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...es specific time for doing, while if we couldnt spend enough time, the work couldnt be ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... we couldnt spend enough time, the work couldnt be done completely. for example, I reme...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...e, the work couldnt be done completely. for example, I remember that when I was stu...
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Line 2, column 361, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... do some work such as studying, working part time job and attending to music class. I had...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...p working as I should pass my exam so I couldnt do different things because of limited ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...se of limited my time my limited time. for engagement to several activities, an in...
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Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ent which when people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. F...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73360974212 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546666666667 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.689148024 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6666666667 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254463887656 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825634619845 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138303748092 0.0737576698707 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192984654373 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153666279203 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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