Considering the development of technology and the inspiring influences on social reactions obeg the government to invent the strict panishment and role. In fact, the governments have to overseas the problems that occure among the modern daily life by differents means to impediments people from doing criminal works. As far as I am concerns, governments rulls to prevents this important social problems have become stricter than befor. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
first of all, due to developing technology and increasing the access of people to the secure personal data the number of stolen data have been dramaticaly increased. Therefore, politician have decided to strict the rull of using internet for people to avoid this making such issues. One of my own example is a good case in point. I was working in a central bank in the big city for a long time. As the the time passes and the internet developed our banking proccesse has became easier in comparison to the time without internet. However, the problem of stoling the bank acount data had been exceedingly enhanced, which were forced the police to contrrole and review the security of banking acounts and people access to their accounts. During that days I was sawing colosal emounts of that happened that was quite influenc on changing the banks rules.
Second, it goes withot saying that, incrising the number of crimes in modern society obegs government to impediments childrens and reduce their freedom. In fact living through liberal social and opened governments let people to have their own rights, However, in some condition they obey from the rule and cause tremendos amounts of catasterofic crimes.The recents estatistics about the number of crimes which happend in the united states during the last years presents the dramatic enhauncing in the schools crime by using the weapon which was freestand to use before and become ristricted by politician this years.
In conclusion, I totaly agree that the rule againc the nwe crime in new days of life have changed and get on stricter than former. It does not only for easy acces to the internet but also for having more social freedom which were commen among young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56149174416 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569518716578 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.0069531451 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.666666667 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9333333333 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0962417116702 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0296177753485 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256536497003 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0570764082898 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141013785122 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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