Celebrities play a pivotal role in society. Some people believe that famous entertainment and athletes are more significant and important to younger people than older one. However, others disagree. In my opinion celebrities play crucial role in younger people life. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in following essay.
First of all, Younger people often spend most of their leisure time to watching shows and performance of their interesting athletic and entertainment. according to the Time magazine about “seventy-five” percent of youngster spending their spare time on watching program about their favorite entertainment and athletic. For example, I am a university student and I have always concentrate on reading newspaper and watching television about my celebrities. moreover, during my school time my friend and I follow our celebrities’ news on social media such you tube, face book or Instagram. this circumstances give me a chance to enjoy my leisure time and become aware of my interesting celebrities’ news. This example clearly shows that young people are more involving with social media to follow celebrities.
furthermore, old people are much busy and have not enough spare time to track celebrities. most of them are working for long time in every day. Thus they should spend their leisure time with their family. For instance, my father has worked eight hours a day. He is really tiered when he came back to home. Therefore, he has prefered to pass his evening time with us in a restaurant and cinema. This circumstances help him to feel more relax than spending on TV and celebrities program. This example clearly illustrates that old people have not enough spare time than young people to follow celebrities news.
In conclusion. I strongly agree that young celebrities are more important to young people than older one. For two reasons. First young people are more involve with social media, second, old individual have not enough time to follow celebrities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26234567901 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07300014708 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506172839506 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5380458527 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7272727273 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13636363636 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220414091213 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651899413464 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751726795579 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159347626506 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518507938304 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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