Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

Parents play a pivotal role in children's education. Some parents who have a job believe that the best use of the time with children is to have fun playing games. However, others believe that is better to doing things which are related to their schoolwork. In my opinion, the best way is to help their little ones with their school works. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, parents could have relatively control on their kids' educational level in their extra time through this way. When you enroll your child to the school, the teacher often asks you to help and review her/his assignments to reinforce and manage your baby's learning. One of my friends' experience is a good case in point. I have a friend who has had three children. She is very busy for working five days a week, thus she had not enough time to spent with her children. One day the teacher of her daughter asked her to inform about her daughter's educational situation which was not good enough. My friend called me and I knew that she was so upset because she could not spend enough time to help and manage her daughter's schoolwork. This example clearly illustrates that the less parents' attention to the school works of their children, the less development of their learning performance.
Second, parents are the best person who can declining their kids' stress when they are dealing with their exams. If you do not spend enough time with your son/daughter to support his/her, they would feel being under pressure during their school's test days. My own experience is a good example. I was the second girl in my four-child family. My father and mother, both were working 10 hours a day. they have never noticed when I had such a hard time before my exams, because they have never been at home to comfort me and give sense of confidence, therefor I passed my tests not so good. However, my close friend Jane always was happy after her exam because her mother spent adequate time with her before the exam. This example is an obvious illustration of that how much parents could be effective for their fruit of their lives during their exam's time.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to devote for their family, the best use of time is helping their school's home works. It not only aiding the quality of their study, but also diminishing their stress during their exam time.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 38, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'controlled'.
Suggestion: controlled
... First, parents could have relatively control on their kids educational level in thei...
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Line 2, column 776, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun parents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...is example clearly illustrates that the less parents attention to the school works o...
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Line 2, column 781, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...ample clearly illustrates that the less parents attention to the school works of their ...
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Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ther, both were working 10 hours a day. they have never noticed when I had such a ha...
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Line 3, column 616, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
... so good. However, my close friend Jane always was happy after her exam because her mother...
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Line 3, column 765, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... is an obvious illustration of that how much parents could be effective for their fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61520737327 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31307601893 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497695852535 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7647099356 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0869565217 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8695652174 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69565217391 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38313996836 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119433761274 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137326656168 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301518909705 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129843238634 0.0645574589148 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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