Human being needs to live with other community to stay their emotional demand and make your life pleasant. The more social relationship you have the the happier you are in life. There is a famous proverb “blood is thicker than water” it means that blood relations are stronger and more important than friendship. What is clear is that friend is someone you choose to be in your life. Whereas, family in inflicted upon you which is not changed. Some people believes that friendship are more important than family relationship. However, others disagree. In my opinion, in terms of prioritization of crucial needs family comes before friends. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in following essay.
First of all, the care given by parents is always unconditional. However, in bad time there is no guarantee that your friends will be able to be with you. What is implied is that family is always there for you in time of need. When you are sick, your parents stay awake with you. One of my own experience is a good case in point. Once I was a teenage and I was studding in high school I got accident with a car which cause me to stay at hospital for a month. During that days my parents were extremely sadness and careful with me till I completely come better. I was really upset because none of my friend come to see me in a hospital even on my bed not to stay for a long time. When I got my health I and I went to school all my friends come to me and help me to find the practice that I was fall behind them. This example clearly illustrates that parent are more helpful than friend in the time you need them. My parents were with me without nothing they asked me. if I hadn’t seen this happened, I would have never believed that parents are closer to you than friends.
Second, parents are always supporting you from childhood to adult. When you are child they learn you how to eat, how to walk, how to find a job in the future and everything you need to learn. When you need to make a decision in your life they have always trying to respect your decision. However, friends are not always in situation to support you. For example, I remember when I was graduated from college I made a decision to change my major from mathematic to art which was my interest major. as my family were always the first who were always help their children in a hard situation I knew that if I tell them about my decision they would undoubtedly respect my mind like before. However, when I asked my friends about my new decision they had not even though about it which means that it was not their priority. This example clearly illustrates that how much parents are supportive than your friend in a crucial situation.
In conclusion: I certainly believe that family relationships are more significant than friendship. There are two important reasons. parents not only are more unconditional helper than friend but also are more protective than friendships support.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, whereas, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 15.1003584229 272% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 96.0 43.0788530466 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5530726257 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54035123143 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441340782123 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6501555922 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.40625 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.78125 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84375 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0765407774226 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272973717951 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0289832580102 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0489016683992 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03194146199 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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