living through modern technology invent an environment which inspire every individual to change their lifstyle and compose new approch in their duty of life. sochial network, cell phone and online game are such a new technology that todayes are used in every home. Some people believes that being this kinds of thing among studying make education harder than before. However, others disagree. In my view such technology are not only usefull for children but have possitive effect on their studing proceces. I fell this way for two reasons which I will explore in the folowng essay.
First of all, it is obious that every students are now need to have some entertainment which could help and preper their mind more clear and active due to have a better study time. If students get involve with such technological network they will got a chance to have welleducated time. Study shows that students who are not just spend their time on reading and mange their opurtunitis to make the most of their time are more succesful than others who just reed their book and never use such thish social network. this results illustrates that how such technological entertainment have possitive effects on childrens education.
Second, there are some benefits with using social network among studing time. we cant omt this sheer truth that technology made a circumstances to control and save your time over the cours of action. children can have their vacation during their study bt staying at home but cominicating with theoir friend. On the other hand, they can save their time and spend it in their reading. My own experienc is a good case in poin. when I was was studing at university the pandamic infection had been distributed among worlds which forces every government to noked down the cities thus nobody must see each other until that remains. The most important event was that I had just a chance to have connection with my friend by my cellphon which I realized that it was helped me to not only have such enterinment comunication but also my time had been saved,which was prety usefull.
In conclusion, I utterly disagree with the statement that cell phone, online games, and social networking Web sitemake study harder.It is not only save the children's time to study but also gave them such energy to boost their studing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, well, in conclusion, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90862944162 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49372424698 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548223350254 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5627424064 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.444444444 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18620414624 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627118229851 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058647121905 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12609749489 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153842893248 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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