Do yo agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict

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Do yo agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.

To my way of thinking obeying rules for youths are necessary because not only does it cause societies to become progressed, but also young people get prepared for a future life.

The first reason which should be stated here is that societies need obedient people to succeed in their goals. Actually, if people in a society do not want to follow rules of their leader and country, they will not have ordered and tidy country. Therefore, the leader cannot manage and control the people, so the country will fail in its plans. For example, approximately two decades ago, in my country, young people had complained because of strict rules in high schools. There were several rules, like not allowing to come to school because of unusual hairstyles or informal clothes and put on any kind of makeup. Special committee had built to investigate the complaints in order to decide whether any change is needed or not. In the end, they decided to allow students to come to school as they like, yet when these students grew up, they did not learn to obey the rules, so over many cases, they had complained, and had made a lot of problems for the government. Actually, learning to follow the rules is important for coordinating the country.

Another point worth discussing here is that people should learn how to accept rules and perform them from lower ages to prepare for a future life. While some people claim that youths should live freely and without rules to succeed, I do not agree. I think, successful people always had strict rules, and someone cannot progress in haphazard situations. For example, again consider the high school in the period of two decades ago. Students sometimes did not attend school at the specified time, so sometimes they had missed several important classes. As a result, they did not learn some lessons. Apart from that, when they went to works in the future, they did not use to obey from their manager, and sometimes they did not attend at work in a right time, and did not know some knowledge, since they had not been tutored at school, so it made the managers angry about them. Therefore, everybody accepted that they were not responsible people, and were not suitable for a life.

To summarize, as I mentioned, there are several reasons, like causing to succeed and getting ready for future life why I think it is necessary for young people to experience obeying rules from lower ages.

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Average: 6.8 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 518, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'coming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: coming
...e were several rules, like not allowing to come to school because of unusual hairstyles...
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Line 5, column 667, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...nt to works in the future, they did not use to obey from their manager, and sometim...
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Line 5, column 979, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople, and were not suitable for a life. To summarize, as I mentioned, there are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, therefore, while, apart from, for example, i think, kind of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78758949881 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39912483593 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498806682578 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5886445443 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.444444444 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2777777778 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152928631512 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571628774312 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615888490772 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111066425178 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331455430413 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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